- To: Alper Yegin <alper.yegin@yegin.org>
- Subject: Review of link info draft -02
- From: Brett Pentland <brett.pentland@eng.monash.edu.au>
- Date: Wed, 19 Oct 2005 18:11:03 +1000
- Original-recipient: rfc822;brett.pentland@eng.monash.edu.au
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Hi Alper, Sorry I'm just writing this now when the last call ended yesterday, but I just found a few things you might want to consider. The draft looks very good but there are a few typos (listed below). I'm not sure what should be there, but I also wonder if the security considerations section is too brief. Regards, Brett. Intro, para 3, line 1 s/on/of/ OR perhaps s/on/to/ Intro, para 4, line 1 s/It be noted/It should be noted/ Intro, para 6, line 3 s/strenght/strength/ 2.3, para 4 I think there's a mix up: Disassociation <--> non-RSN De-authentication and disassociation <--> RSN rather than the other way around as written? 2.3, para 5, line 1, perhaps: s/station/stations/ line 2 s/others/each other/ 2.4, para 1, lines 3,4 probably should be either "... is specified by both a physical layer and a medium access control (MAC) layer..." or "...is specified by a physical layer/medium access control (MAC) layer..." ie. either remove "both" or remove the "/" (and replace it with "and a"). 2.4.2, para 1, line 2 s/Tranparent/Transparent/