Re: [DNA] Review of link info draft -02

[Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.ca>]

Hi Alper,
	Since the comments are editorial, you can go ahead and make the 
changes(if you have no objections). Submit the new version by the I-D 
cutoff date, which is on Monday Oct 24th by 9AM EST. This will be the 
version which we will submit to the IESG for consideration.

Cheers
Suresh

Brett Pentland wrote:
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> Subject:
> Review of link info draft -02
> From:
> Brett Pentland <brett.pentland@eng.monash.edu.au>
> Date:
> Wed, 19 Oct 2005 18:11:03 +1000
> To:
> Alper Yegin <alper.yegin@yegin.org>
> 
> To:
> Alper Yegin <alper.yegin@yegin.org>
> 
> 
> Hi Alper,
> 
> Sorry I'm just writing this now when the last call ended yesterday, but
> I just found a few things you might want to consider.  The draft looks
> very good but there are a few typos (listed below).  I'm not sure what
> should be there, but I also wonder if the security considerations
> section is too brief.
> 
> Regards,
> Brett.
> 
> Intro, para 3, line 1
> s/on/of/ OR perhaps s/on/to/
> 
> Intro, para 4, line 1
> s/It be noted/It should be noted/
> 
> Intro, para 6, line 3
> s/strenght/strength/
> 
> 2.3, para 4
> I think there's a mix up:
> 
> Disassociation <--> non-RSN
> De-authentication and disassociation <--> RSN
> 
> rather than the other way around as written?
> 
> 2.3, para 5, line 1, perhaps:
> s/station/stations/
> line 2
> s/others/each other/
> 
> 2.4, para 1, lines 3,4
> probably should be either "... is specified by both a physical layer and
> a medium access control (MAC) layer..." or "...is specified by a
> physical layer/medium access control (MAC) layer..."
> ie.  either remove "both" or remove the "/" (and replace it with "and
> a").
> 
> 2.4.2, para 1, line 2
> s/Tranparent/Transparent/
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